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Romeo & Cinderella
« on: March 04, 2011, 10:24:17 pm »
Romeo & Cinderella


I am Cinderella and He is Romeo
(obvious naman sa title noh?)

Ako po pala si Kath, nice to meet you po :) Sana po may magbasa  :-*
« Last Edit: March 20, 2011, 10:22:37 pm by ilabyu*kath »
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Re: Romeo & Cinderella
« Reply #1 on: March 04, 2011, 10:37:39 pm »
Hello Kath, I'm Angel.

May Classmate ako, kath din ang name niya. ;D

Wala lang, nag-gagala ako sa CC until One day :D Nakita ko tong stowie mo. ::)

12 na me :)
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Re: Romeo & Cinderella
« Reply #2 on: March 05, 2011, 04:50:53 pm »
Hi Kath,

maganda ang simula! Keep up the good work. .

ISHE nga pala  ;)
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Re: Romeo & Cinderella
« Reply #3 on: March 05, 2011, 05:57:26 pm »
Ako na naaliw sa title mo. LOL.
Sinasabi ko na hindi ako laging nandito pero support ko `to sa abot ng aking makakaya.
yanyan nga pala.
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Re: Romeo & Cinderella
« Reply #4 on: March 05, 2011, 06:08:02 pm »
:) Support ! Joy here
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Re: Romeo & Cinderella
« Reply #5 on: March 05, 2011, 06:24:31 pm »
I suggest you change the prologue cause it's pretty much taken from the Twilight series. Honey, plagiarism is not good -- at all.
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Re: Romeo & Cinderella
« Reply #6 on: March 05, 2011, 08:57:05 pm »
Quote from: anji07 on March 04, 2011, 10:37:39 pm
Hello Kath, I'm Angel.

May Classmate ako, kath din ang name niya. ;D

Wala lang, nag-gagala ako sa CC until One day :D Nakita ko tong stowie mo. ::)

12 na me :)

Buti nalang sa lahat ng stories n nadaanan mo, ito yung na-istumble upon mo. Nice to meet you

Quote from: ishe on March 05, 2011, 04:50:53 pm
Hi Kath,

maganda ang simula! Keep up the good work. .

ISHE nga pala  ;)

Thanks. Cute name Ishe, :)

Quote from: yanyan7192 on March 05, 2011, 05:57:26 pm
Ako na naaliw sa title mo. LOL.
Sinasabi ko na hindi ako laging nandito pero support ko `to sa abot ng aking makakaya.
yanyan nga pala.

Thank you Yanyan, I'll do my best not to disappoint you :D
Quote from: x-iRis-x on March 05, 2011, 06:08:02 pm
:) Support ! Joy here

Joy rin ang name ko (more like second name) Thanks

Quote from: poohtoxicity on March 05, 2011, 06:24:31 pm
I suggest you change the prologue cause it's pretty much taken from the Twilight series. Honey, plagiarism is not good -- at all.

Thanks for the reminder. Medyo bago lng po kc ko dito. Pasensyaa na po. Gagawa na lang po ako ulit :)
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Romeo & Cinderella [PROLOGUE]
« Reply #7 on: March 19, 2011, 04:42:45 pm »
PROLOGUE
CINDERELLA. Oo, ang babaeng boplax na nag-iwan ng sapotas niya sa hagdanan. Oo na,  ang girlaloo na asawa ni PRINCE CHARMING. Oo na nga eh, ang babaeng hindi parin na-realize na pareparehas sila ng asawa nila Snowwhite, Sleeping Beauty & Repunzel. Grabe yung prince charming na yan, ang landi! Daig pa ang nanay ko at ni Rubi. Malapit na sa standards ni Henry VIII . Teka lang, saan na ba tayo napad? Ay oo nga pala si Cinderella. Kayo na...kayo na ang may alam ng love life niya. Eh, paano naman ako? Cinderella rin naman name ko ah? Bigyan pansin ang love life kong itech! Ehem, introduction muna: My name is Cinderella Gonzales...pwede niyo akong tawaging ELLA. Hindi Cindy, Derella, Indere or kung ano pang churva! Ella lang po please. 16 years old po ako (young and fresh!). Anak po ako ng isang beauty queen but unfortunately hindi ko namanan ang kagandahan niya. I'm currently single and mentally dating Romeo Hernandez.


ROMEO. Oo, ang lalaking martir kay Juliet. Oo na, ang boylet na mabilis na nagmove-on kay Rosaline. Oo na nga eh, ang lalaking dramatic na nagpakamatay hindi muna hinintay na magising si Juliet. Hay naku, Juliet, hindi mo kasi sinabi kay Romeo na nagpaka-sleeping beauty ka. Teka, saan na ba tayo napad pad? Oh yeah, oo nga pala si Romeo...Pero iba itong Romeo Hernandez ko noh? Siya...siya na nagbibigay ligaya sa puso ko, siya na nagbibigay liwanag sa buhay ko, siya na nagbibigay init sa gabi ko...uy wag pa tayong green-minded dyan. Nagtataka siguro kayo kung sino siya sa buhay ko noh?

Boyfriend?
Suitor?
Ex-BF?
Best Friend?
Childhood lover?
Fiance'?

Unfortunately, none of the above dahil siya ang

BBFF

(baklang best friend forever) ko. So what kung bakla siya? Basta gagawin ko ang lahat para mapasaakin siya.  ;)

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Re: Romeo & Cinderella
« Reply #8 on: March 20, 2011, 08:25:33 am »
OMG!
Grabe ha!
Nawindang ang mundo ko sa pRologue mo!
Lalo na dun sa last part! :D
Ma-inlove ba naman sa bAding?!
AnyWay,
supPort ko ito sis...
HetTy in the house... :D
BTW, sa style of writing mO, siGuro...
Masiyahin kang tao at energetic laGi... Tama bA? :D
Chapter 1 na agad sis! :)
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Re: Romeo & Cinderella
« Reply #9 on: March 20, 2011, 09:43:36 am »
  :o :o
Nakakashock naman yung prologue. Naguluhan ako kay Romeo. Nice..
will wait for chapter 1 :)
-czhareen  ;)
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Re: Romeo & Cinderella
« Reply #10 on: March 20, 2011, 11:04:07 am »
Hi Kath! Update na agad! Please? ;D
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Re: Romeo & Cinderella
« Reply #11 on: March 20, 2011, 11:13:13 am »
Same 2nd name ko din yun Joy pero mas yun yung ginagamit ko kaysa sa 1st name ko :D. Grabe naman si Romeo lalaking lalaki yung pangalan tapos kekendeng kendeng pala tarooosh!  ;D
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Re: Romeo & Cinderella
« Reply #12 on: March 20, 2011, 11:25:54 am »
Your title is truly eye-catching! You would never think of combining Romeo & Cinderella on one story. Although, for a second there I thought it would have the same story as they did in their own but with a different kind of modern twist. But nonetheless, great start! Tip: Don’t get so bogged down in description the readers will tend to not care about the story anymore. Keep up the good work!





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Re: Romeo & Cinderella
« Reply #13 on: March 20, 2011, 12:04:27 pm »
Hi Miss Author! I'm Feii, at aabangan ko talaga ang Chapter 1 mo! Mukang exciting yung story mo eh. :)
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Re: Romeo & Cinderella
« Reply #14 on: March 20, 2011, 10:13:46 pm »
Quote from: animelover_hetty on March 20, 2011, 08:25:33 am
OMG!
Grabe ha!
Nawindang ang mundo ko sa pRologue mo!
Lalo na dun sa last part! :D
Ma-inlove ba naman sa bAding?!
AnyWay,
supPort ko ito sis...
HetTy in the house... :D
BTW, sa style of writing mO, siGuro...
Masiyahin kang tao at energetic laGi... Tama bA? :D
Chapter 1 na agad sis! :)

Actually, mas exciting po ang characters ko kaysa sa author. Medyo boring kc ako (yun ang sabi nila). Ang cute ng name mo Hetty <3 Thanks for reading in. I'll update bukas :D

Quote from: xaryn21 on March 20, 2011, 09:43:36 am
  :o :o
Nakakashock naman yung prologue. Naguluhan ako kay Romeo. Nice..
will wait for chapter 1 :)
-czhareen  ;)

Thanks for reading.  Bipolar talaga si Romeo. xD

Quote from: dgurL07 on March 20, 2011, 11:04:07 am
Hi Kath! Update na agad! Please? ;D

Bukas!!!! :D hindi ko pa kasi na-eedit, sana magustuhan niyo kapag narelease na :)

Quote from: x-iRis-x on March 20, 2011, 11:13:13 am
Same 2nd name ko din yun Joy pero mas yun yung ginagamit ko kaysa sa 1st name ko :D. Grabe naman si Romeo lalaking lalaki yung pangalan tapos kekendeng kendeng pala tarooosh!  ;D

Masasabi ko lang maraming salamat :D Mas marami pang kalandian ni Romeo sa Chapter 1.

Quote from: thecriticslounge on March 20, 2011, 11:25:54 am
Your title is truly eye-catching! You would never think of combining Romeo & Cinderella on one story. Although, for a second there I thought it would have the same story as they did in their own but with a different kind of modern twist. But nonetheless, great start! Tip: Don’t get so bogged down in description the readers will tend to not care about the story anymore. Keep up the good work!





For more tips, find us on Facebook! By the way, we are a group of people called The Critic's Society & our mission is to help CC authors improve their writing skills &  learn and connect with their fellow authors. You can find us here: The Critic Lounge on Facebook!

Happy writing. Cheers!

Thank you po sa guidelines. It's great na may ganito pong group na tumutulong sa mga writers to be better. Sana mo ipagpatuloy niyo lang yan and i'm hoping hindi ko po kayo madidisappoint sa story ko. Thank you po ulit and I "liked" your fan page and reading some tips na rin :D

Quote from: vampdubistaaa on March 20, 2011, 12:04:27 pm
Hi Miss Author! I'm Feii, at aabangan ko talaga ang Chapter 1 mo! Mukang exciting yung story mo eh. :)

Maraming maraming salamat Feii, :D Sobra po akong natuwa sa feedback niyo kaya pagbubutihan ko po.
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