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Re: Writer's Block !!! You Kill Me !! PART 5 POSTED NOW MAY 29 SATURDAY
« Reply #30 on: May 29, 2010, 11:26:18 am »
Ha. Moses is looking for another girl. :> I like his girl-type, someone who has character. ;) What in the world did Bonifacio do now?! Nice name, btw. Reminds me of KKK. LOL.

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Re: Writer's Block !!! You Kill Me !! PART 5 POSTED NOW MAY 29 SATURDAY
« Reply #31 on: May 29, 2010, 06:43:46 pm »
ASTIG! ;)

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Re: Writer's Block !!! You Kill Me !! PART 5 POSTED NOW MAY 29 SATURDAY
« Reply #32 on: May 30, 2010, 07:51:21 am »
Kuya Ken! I'll support this. O0 And, Bonifacio is a nice name. Reminds me of KKK.  :)

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@ missSHAKEspeare012 - That was hilarious. Can you imagine what dog's think about? I mean some of them are smart. Thanks for sharing that funny scene.

@ missSHAKEspeare012 - Acrobatics. That's a good idea. Physically showing a sense of relief to the max. Persistent girlfriend... I'm basing her on several girls I know who are very similar with each other.


I absolutely have no idea. It wore the usual blank dog expression. Yes, I believe they're smart, but that particular dog gave me the impression that sometimes they think blankly like us humans.

I misspelled acrobatics. Sorry. Yes, I sometimes do that when the relief is overwhelming. Several girls. The common nagging ones, you mean?

Wow. Delilah was one of the characters in the Bible that I want to tear into pieces. Kidding. But seriously, I don't like her. Same goes with the Delilah here. They only have faces, and the boys go crazy about them. Good thing I wasn't born pretty. Haha. I wonder why Bonifacio called Moses just to bail him out of the jail.
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PART 6
« Reply #34 on: June 02, 2010, 06:02:27 am »
Bonifacio explained what happened, and how he ended up getting incarcerated in jail. I would have been shocked. But after all his activities over the years, nothing surprises me from my Filipino friend.

"Don't say anything over the phone Bonifacio. This is not a secure line."

"I forgot all about that."

"I'm going to call our man Confucius. He has the best lawyers in town. In the meantime. Just sit there and wait."

"Thanks Moses. Looks like it's going to be stale coffee and rock hard stale bread for me here for a while. Let me know if you were able to get Confucius's lawyer team."

We hung up the phone.

I checked my cell phone for Confucius's number. I have it on speed dial. I called him. He's not available. I left a message.

Looks like the old gang is somehow kind of getting together this past day. It reminded me back in high school when we were in the same home room class. There were so many different kind of races. There was over 40 of us there. We were just like New York City. The "Melting Pot" of the world. Some of us are alive right now. Some of us are gone. Some are out of the country. Some went on to better things. Others went behind bars. But that was a tight knit group.

The first year of school, we went through three or four home room teachers that first semester. The first was an old lady, and I think she couldn't take us anymore and she just quit. The second was this weasel-type of guy and he couldn't put up with our rowdy bunch and he quit. Then I think there was another one, but she only lasted a day or two, and asked to be transferred. Then the final teacher was Mr. Killerbrooks. The wrestling coach. The guy was built like Hulk Hogan, and almost as big as Hulk Hogan. He didn't take our crap, let alone put up with it. He disciplined that group I tell you. The following semester, guess who the school placed as our home room teacher? Mr. Killerbrooks all over again. He wasn't too bad. It's just the guys couldn't be as rowdy as they want to be. For example, there is no snow ball fight inside the classroom during home room class, when it's snowing outside. Oh yes. Our guys were notorios for opening the window and getting the snow and making snowballs and start hurling it at one another.

If you were an outsider, and walked inside that home room class of ours, you would have thought you walked in a mental institution and all the insane patients were loose, and chaos is all over the place. To all of us at the time it seemed normal. But looking back, it made me laugh. We did seem like messed up looney birds inside a bird cage.

This brings me to a "Writer's Tip", to get through a "Writer's Block". Make a list of your classmates in the past. Describe how each one acted out in home room class, or section class. How were they different from each other. Did everyone get along? Were there groups or cliques formed? What was the teacher like in that home room or section class? Who were the biggest troublemakers?

Now that I've written that away on my little notebook of ideas here. I think I'll just eat that sandwich tomorrow. I'm going to sleep early. It's been months since I've been able to sleep seven hours straight. I've got class and work tomorrow. Before getting some shut eye, I tried to remind myself, I have to call Confucius, then call Delilah, and avoid Yusuf's girlfriend's call, and if I have time between work and class, drop by the central booking precinct and see if Bonifacio's okay.

And at that I drift off to a long sleep.



@ Lonely Procrastinator - At the end guys want the deeper girl. But most of the time in the beginning the shallow ones always seem to take his interest, until her shallowness slowly unravels as the relationship deepens.

@ zac.eros - Thanks.

@ ella.ella.ella - Thanks. Everyone said the same think about the triple K.

@ missSHAKEspeare012 - Not the nagging ones. I had to put a combination of good and bad traits. There's something about talking dogs. I just can't put my finger on it. And I will find out what sort of trouble Bonifacio is in and let everyone know.
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Re: Writer's Block !!! You Kill Me !! PART 6 POSTED NOW JUNE 2 WEDNESDAY
« Reply #35 on: June 02, 2010, 06:16:26 am »
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@ missSHAKEspeare012 - Not the nagging ones. I had to put a combination of good and bad traits. There's something about talking dogs. I just can't put my finger on it. And I will find out what sort of trouble Bonifacio is in and let everyone know.

Can you tell me what the good traits are? Talking dogs. I'd love to have one. The one I have here in my home sings like a madman. I find their names amusing. Moses, Bonifacio and Confucius. It's like each one has his own belief. Guess what, I followed what Moses said, about the listing of classmates. Bitter cold nostalgia.
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Re: Writer's Block !!! You Kill Me !! PART 6 POSTED NOW JUNE 2 WEDNESDAY
« Reply #36 on: June 02, 2010, 03:38:56 pm »
Hi Mr. Author? Mr. nga ba? Hmmm.. I happen to pass by your thread and started reading babaero inc. and this particular story of yours. Nakaka-tuwa yung way mo ng pag-sulat ng story. Support this one! :D

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Re: Writer's Block !!! You Kill Me !! PART 6 POSTED NOW JUNE 2 WEDNESDAY
« Reply #37 on: June 03, 2010, 11:17:46 pm »
@ marshmallowcooki3 - Thanks. Actually, Babaero Inc. I tried writing it in tagalog so I can practice my tagalog. But as the story progressed, I ran out of tagalog words. So the pacing and what I really wanted the characters to convey started perhaps lagging a little. I should have written it all in english from the beginning. Also, it has two separate viewpoints.

As for this story, it will be basically, first person narration and viewpoint from beginning to end. That is why the style comes across as if the character is talking to the reader as if the reader was a friend in the room. So the reader gets to see what Moses sees, feels what he feels, and gets to visit his viewpoint.

It feels like a stream of consciousness type of writing. It's reader friendly as well. At the same time, as the story progresses, we get a little suspense, because the story is first person narrative and viewpoint only. So we never get to see what's in the other characters' minds.

Enjoy.

@ missSHAKEspeare012 - Good traits. There are various traits that can be considered good. However, they are all up to interpretations when the character shows that trait. Being kind, showing empaty, always smiling, reassuring, very understanding, etc.

There is something interesting with talking dogs.

I wanted to do something different with naming the characters in this story. And of course, putting samples to combat writer's block, as the title indicates.
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Re: Writer's Block !!! You Kill Me !! PART 6 POSTED NOW JUNE 2 WEDNESDAY
« Reply #38 on: June 03, 2010, 11:25:23 pm »
The names in this story are awesome. Confucius. Ha! First time I encountered someone in CC who used that name. And I like Mr. Killerbrooks. He's pretty much like my second year homeroom adviser(except for the hulk-like body. Just the discipline thing,), and is my favorite teacher still. :>

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Re: Writer's Block !!! You Kill Me !! PART 6 POSTED NOW JUNE 2 WEDNESDAY
« Reply #39 on: June 04, 2010, 09:34:20 am »
The names in this story are awesome. Confucius. Ha! First time I encountered someone in CC who used that name. And I like Mr. Killerbrooks. He's pretty much like my second year homeroom adviser(except for the hulk-like body. Just the discipline thing,), and is my favorite teacher still. :>

Yup. I just wanted to use names reflecting historical characters of particular coutnries. Then for the homeroom teacher it was actually a wrestling coach from a school. Feel free to drop by here.
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PART 7
« Reply #40 on: June 04, 2010, 04:05:48 pm »
There is a loud buzzing sound. Am I having a bizarre dream? Another loud buzz jolts my head. And another...and another...over and over. This  must be some nightmare. Suddenly I wake up.

That was a horrible nightmare. Then a loud buzz shocks my ear and agitated me on my bed. I cursed out loud. It was the doorbell. The sun was still not up. I looked at the cable box and the time says 4:15 AM. Who on Earth could be ringing the bell at this forsaken hour? It better not be a wrong apartment number. I'm not in a good mood for human stupidity this early in the morning.

Better not buzz in the person. It might be crook. I went down the stairs to see who's at the door.

When I got to the door, it was Lila. And she brought a friend. Just grrrreeeeeaaaattt! That's all I need at this hour.

I opened the door and flexed all 43 facial muscles and smile, "Good morning honey. What a great sight to see first thing in the morning!" I go up to her to hug her and give her a kiss.

She pushes me off, "Get off me. Let's go upstairs I want to see who is with you."

I reassured her, "There you go again. Jealous over nothing. I was tired and was asleep all night."

She gave her friend a quick look, "Just wait for me in the car. I won't be long." And at that, her friend walked back to the double-parked car on the street.

Delilah grabs my hand and pulls my arm hard leading me upstairs to my apartment. She opened the door. She doesn't even try to get comfortable. She walks straight to my bedroom. I go over to the kitchen and heat up a kettle full of water.

This is going to be great morning I told myself sarcastically with my eyes rolling upwards. I open my eyes up again and I asked God a question, "God, are you sure I wasn't named Samson at birth?"

I did not receive an answer. At that point I knew God had a good sense of humor and is laughing right now.

Delilah stormed out of my bedroom and thunders to the bathroom. I heard her open the shower curtains to make sure no one was hiding at the bath tub.

"Where is she Moses?" She sounded incensed. Angry.

She storms out of the bathroom. Then proceeded to open up my closet, then went to the hallway. Then inspected the window to make sure no one was out at the window sill.

"There you go being delusional again honey. There's no chics here. It's all in that very imaginative mind of yours."

She gets in my face. "Why didn't you answer my call last night?" She asked.

"What call?" I lied. I didn't want to tell her I didn't feel like talking to her.

"Where's your phone? I want to see it. Give it to me."

The girl has gone insane. Jealousy. Too much drives a woman nuts. Then she grabbed me. A hug and she leaned on my shoulder. Then her head kept moving. To my neck. Then my chest.

I pushed her off, "What the heck do you think you are doing honey?"

"I want to make sure I don't smell any woman's perfume of woman's lotion on you. If you were with a woman, you would have her scent on your body."

That's it. She really ticked me off. "Why are you here this early in the morning waking me up when you know I have class and work today?"

"I just wanted to make sure I'm not sharing you with another."

"Look Delilah. This has to stop. You can't just come down her barging and going all around as if you and I are married. We're not. You have your life, I have mines."

She crossed her arms and frowned, "So now you are telling me I'm not welcome here?"

Leave it to her to turn it around. "I didn't say that. You have to respect me getting sleep. You didn't come down here just for sex right now did you?"

"I'm not in the mood." She uncrossed her arms and walked out to the living room.

I followed her, "I didn't say that."

Her cell phone rang. She answered and told her friend she'll be coming down soon.

I looked up and thanked God.

I grabbed her waist and gently held her in my arms. "Come on. You know you're my and one and only. I don't even look at the other girls." I continued to her neck and planted kisses on her.

"Don't think doing this soave move you're doing right now is going to get you out of trouble. You better answer your phone next time I call."

She started walking to the door. "Let's go shopping on Saturday."

I tilted my heard and looked sideways as if I was disappointed. "Honey you know how much I hate shopping."

She replied, "I promise it won't take hours. I'll make it short. Promise."

I told her okay, knowing she didn't mean it.

I opened the door. She walked out. Then she turned around and grabbed my neck and kissed me. And she left. I was so relieved to close the door so I can go back to sleep. I realized her lipstick had a fruitful taste to it.

I should just stay up since I have to wake up in less than two hours anyway. I might oversleep. I decided to go back to sleep. I set the alarm for an hour and hit the bed again.

I hope I have a better wakeup than this in less than two hours.
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Re: Writer's Block !!! You Kill Me !! PART 7 POSTED NOW JUNE 4 FRIDAY
« Reply #41 on: June 04, 2010, 04:14:09 pm »
So much for having a shtty relationship with the worst girl. :P Hahaha. Poor Moses.

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Re: Writer's Block !!! You Kill Me !! PART 7 POSTED NOW JUNE 4 FRIDAY
« Reply #42 on: June 05, 2010, 01:37:02 pm »
I wrote up part 8 already. But it's a dream sequence. I'm not sure if this is the right time to post a dream sequence. Perhaps I should just have Moses wake up and work from there.

So much for having a shtty relationship with the worst girl. :P Hahaha. Poor Moses.

Well let's hope he works it out with her or vice versa.

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Re: Writer's Block !!! You Kill Me !! PART 7 POSTED NOW JUNE 4 FRIDAY
« Reply #43 on: June 05, 2010, 01:46:23 pm »
Maybe dozing off in school or work? Just a suggestion. :> Then you can proceed to the dream sequence you're talking about.

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« Reply #44 on: June 05, 2010, 09:14:47 pm »
Why is it only now that I've seen this story here in CC? I could really use some tips about overcoming writer's block right now.

It's my first time to encounter a story that makes use of Biblical and historical names. Though it sounds old, I find it unique.  ;)

Btw, Zee here.  :)
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