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Better in time - updated. chapter 16 inside :)
« on: April 13, 2010, 09:18:27 pm »
Prologue


How far will you go just to be with the one you love?


“Kung talagang kapatid kita hahayaan mo na siya sakin.”

“Mahirap yang sinasabe mo Nadine.”


“Walang mahirap sa nag mamahal Keyti.”

“Mahal ko din siya Nadine. Hindi lang ikaw ang may karapatang magmahal.”

“Gusto ko lang siyang makasama hanggat may oras pa ko.”

“Alam kung may sakit ka pero Nadine may anak kame.”



Time heals all wounds and so do love.
But all wounds leave a scar.


“Ang lakas din ng loob mo no? Pagkatapos mo siyang iwan ngayon babalik ka? Para ano? Para saktan siya ulit?”

“Pare wala kang karapatang sumbatan ako. Unang una hindi naman ikaw ang binalikan ko.”

“Alam ko. Ayoko lang ulit masaktan si Keyti. Hindi siya manhid Dylan. Sobra siyang nasaktan nung iniwan mo siya. Pabayaan mo na siyang mabuhay ng masaya kasama ko at ng anak niyo.”

“May anak kame?”



A scar that will forever reminds about the past.


I’m tired of sacrificing. All I ever wanted is to be happy.

Now that I’ve found my happiness I won’t let it go.

No matter what I say or do there’s just no way to get over you.

I guess we never really moved on.

What if unexpected interferences happen?
Would time and love be enough to make them happy?
And for them to get


Better in time
By: Carlene Jeremy


This story is purely (as in purely) made by me.  Names, characters, places, and incidents
Are either the product of MY IMAGINATION or used fictitiously. Any resemblance to actual events or locales persons, living or dead is entirely coincidental.


Acknowledgements

At first I was hesitating to post this story fearing that nobody will read and support it. I’m not good at this kind of a thing yet but that’s why there’s YOU. I really need your suggestions and criticisms to make this story a success. Hindi po ito perfect. Gusto ko lang po I share sainyo yung mga thoughts ko. Well after I posted my story fortunately may nag comment. She’s one of my BFFS. Special thanks to Frances Milan AKA imFranCes :) She never stopped supporting me. Thanks din kay Kyra AKA jaky11 Lage siyang first tagger. I really appreaciate your comments sis. Hindi din mawawala ang isa pang Frances sa buhay ko AKA ilabtsokoleyt. She’s cool actually. Katulad ni Ces and kyra ang supportive niya. Meron pa si sis ghe AKA ghegheghe16. May story din siya sana I support niyo. She’s very supportive medyo na ke-carried away lang minsan. Thanks din kay marshmallowcooki3 super baet and super ganda din ng story niya.  :) Kung may hindi man po ako nabangget sorry. Kung meron mang silent readers dyan I fully expect to receive some suggestions and comments. Siyempre thanks din kay God. Lage kong hinihiling sakanya na sana bigyan ako ng thoughts na pwede kong I share sa iba. Sana I support niyo po to. I’m after po sa friendship na pwedeng ma buo in just simple communications. Well I’m friendly naman and I don’t bite. xD

Welcome Friend. ^________^V
Enjoy.


PS

Nung una honestly I’m desperate to have readers. Pero I wantched this movie. Sister Act 2 yung title. Maganda siya actually. One of the nuns there said



“If you woke up in a morning and all you can think about is writing then you’re a writer.”

Hindi po yan yung exact words pero sana ma inspire kayo kase if you have what it takes naman and God gave you a talent. Show it. Loud and proud. Nung una na disappoint ako kase wala akong masyadong readers pero I’m better now. Yes I nead readers pero I think dadateng yun in the right time. Baka hindi pa right time ngayon para magkaron ako ng madameng readers. I’m just a newbie lang naman. Oh siya medyo humahaba na ang speech ko. Baka nalulula na kayo. Well enjoy everyone and have a nice day.


Characters:


Key Tiara "Keyti" Mendoza

Serevhie Rein "Serevhie" Samonte

Dorothy Rein "Dorothy" Samonte

Dylan Anthony "Dylan" Cruz

Nadine Amber "Nadine" Mendez

BFFS ni Keyti:

Shalimar "Shally"Suarez

Frances "Ces" Castañeda

Patricia "Patz" Non

Joleena "Eena" Edig

Others








hi po ;D Carlene here. This is my very own story. Please do support it. Thank you po  :)
« Last Edit: June 02, 2010, 11:19:49 pm by carlene27 »

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« Reply #1 on: April 13, 2010, 09:51:36 pm »
sis !! andito na ko  ;D
pramis support ko to  ;)

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« Reply #2 on: April 13, 2010, 09:57:42 pm »
yiee thankss Ces.  ;D i'm so touched. talagang unag una ka.  :)

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« Reply #3 on: April 13, 2010, 10:00:45 pm »
yiss! haha .. gagawa muna ko ng who's who  ;D
then gawin ko na yung story ko  :D
send ko na lang sayo sa FB yung prologue.
maikli lang naman eh =))

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« Reply #4 on: April 13, 2010, 10:02:39 pm »
okay goodluck Ces. Kaya natin to. Baka bukas ko na ilagay yung chapter one or ngayon na? wadda yew think?

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« Reply #5 on: April 13, 2010, 10:11:09 pm »
hi.
kyra here!
supprot ko to :)

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« Reply #6 on: April 13, 2010, 10:13:23 pm »
Hi po  ;D thanks po na appreciate ko po akala ko kasi walang mag susuport.  ;D

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« Reply #7 on: April 13, 2010, 10:18:07 pm »
Hi po  ;D thanks po na appreciate ko po akala ko kasi walang mag susuport.  ;D
sus!  ;D
wag ka nga nega!
kung wala susupport nandito naman ako eh ;D
atsaka don't worry meron din naman magsusupport sa story mo:)

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« Reply #8 on: April 13, 2010, 10:19:40 pm »
thanks ate binuhay mo ang katawang lupa ko. chareeng lang.  ;D Chapter one na po ba?

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« Reply #9 on: April 13, 2010, 10:30:13 pm »
thanks ate binuhay mo ang katawang lupa ko. chareeng lang.  ;D Chapter one na po ba?
haha
sige update ka na :D

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« Reply #10 on: April 13, 2010, 10:36:00 pm »
okayy sana magustuhan mo po.  ::)

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« Reply #11 on: April 13, 2010, 10:44:29 pm »
okayy sana magustuhan mo po.  ::)

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i think di ko mababasa ngayon kasi
papatulungin na kame  ;D
kukunin pa namen cards namen  :)

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« Reply #12 on: April 13, 2010, 10:54:12 pm »
Ah okay sure sure. Well goodnight I'll be staying late pa eh. by cards you mean report cards?

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« Reply #13 on: April 13, 2010, 11:19:49 pm »
chapter 1
Part 1
RING (ALARM CLOCK) 5:45am

“Aw. Umaga na? Ambilis naman. Parang kakatulog ko palang ha.” So sleepy. ~_~ ZzZ

Sorry for the late introduction. Hey my name is Key (pronounced as Kei)  Tiara Mendoza. Keyti nalang for short. Im a second year student at Paramount High. Im 13 years old to be exact. I’m an only child, so I really like kids. Oh. Life check. Keyti its June meaning my pasok na naman. Well maaga talaga pasukan sa school namen ang maganda lang maaga din ang bakasyon. Sana Bakasyon na ulit. T^T



Bhez Shally calling..

“Hello?”

“Rise and shine Key..”

“Oh bakit ka napatawag?”

“Just cheking kung gising ka na, baka kasi ma late ka na naman. Tandaan first day ngayon.”

“Oo na Bhez gising na ulirat ko..”

“Bute naman. Nga pala sabay tayo pasok ha. Daanan kita jan mamayang 7:15.”

“Okay. Anong oras na ba?”

“Uhm its already 6:50.”

“HUH?! Sige Sige maliligo muna ako.”

“Josko naman Key Tiara Mendoza. Akala ko ba giseng na ulirat mo?! Bilisan mo na!”

“Okay okay..cge bye bhez..”

“Bye..”

Lord! Bute nalang tinawagan ako ng aking ever loving Bhez. To be honest si Shally ang pinaka close ko sa lahat na aking mga BFF I really don’t know why. Siguro one reason kasi mag kalapit lang kami ng house.


After 20 golden minutes tapos na kong maligo.OMG! 5 minutes nalang nandito na si Shally. Eh di pa ko kumakaen. Malas. :'( Pagbaba ko sa kusina kumakain na ang aking Mommy and daddy. Daya di ako inantay.

“Goodmorning Tiara.” Mommy ko yun. I know she calls me Tiara. I really prefer to be called Keyti.

“Morning po :)

“Anak kumain kana.” Alam talaga na aking daddy dearest na hindi ako tumatanggi sa biyaya ni lord. Yes I admit I love foods. Ahaha. But I have to say no this time. Sesermunan ako for sure ni Shally.

“Hindi na po.”


“Bakit naman?”

“Baka kasi ma late ako dad and hindi po ako gutom.”

“Okay..”

But …



But …


IM SORRY SHALLY.


“Sige na po daddy.”

“Akala ko ba busog ka?”

“Nag bago po isip ng tyan ko.”


“Oh eto. Eat up.”

“thank you po.” Siyempre I prayed first before eating.


I CANT TAKE IT. I NEED TO EAT. Fine you can call me matakaw if you want.

DINGDONG

SHOOT! Si shally yun for sure. Ano kayang sasabihen nun?

“Ako na po.”


“Bhez sorry na late ako ng 5 min—“

“Kumakaen pa kasi ako. Kaya ok lang. tara kaen ka muna.”

“What?! I knew it. Sige sige bilisan mo na.”


“Pasok ka muna. Tara.”



“Oh hija. Kamusta? Mag kaklase ba kayo ni Tiara?” Man! Tiara again!

“Hindi ko pa po alam tita.”

“Ah. Sana naman magkaklase kayo para naman mabantayan mo tong only daughter namen.”

“Ah. Opo. Alagang alaga po yan.” sa pagkaen I mumbled, well matakaw kaya yan si Key Tiara Mendoza. Ahahaha.

“Well kaen ka muna.”

“Tapos na po tita. Salamat nalang po.”

“Tiara tapos ka na bang kumae—.”


“Tapos na po.”


 Kitams tapos agad?


“Anak nginuya mo pa ba yung mga kinaen mo?”

“Opo dad.”


“Tubig. Uminom ka anak legal yan.”

“Salamat po.”
Anong oras na ba? Shoot! 7:30 na. lagot . feeling ko babalatan nako ng buhay ni Shally.

“Mom dad una na kami ni Shally. Late na kami eh. Bye.” Kiss.


“Bye anak.”


“Ingat kayo ha.”


“Bhez sorry ha.”

“Okay lang bilisan na naten.”




Sorry guys I cant continue this tonight. But please wait for tomorows update.  ;D
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« Reply #14 on: April 14, 2010, 12:06:33 am »
yow :) cge ! matulog ka na ! haha .. texx na lang kita :P goodnight :)

 

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