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« Reply #60 on: April 27, 2008, 01:28:29 PM »

I read all types. I haven't read the Stephanie Meyer series, but that seems to be the most popular in bookstores here regarding vampire stories.

Personally I like all kinds of stories. But I tend to lean on suspense/thrillers/mystery with an Asian setting. Aside from reading about the mystery and suspense, I learn about the various different cultures and both the good and bad in that particular society's traditions and ways of life.


It's popular but popularity is no assurance that it's good. There's hardly any substance to Twilight, and here some good points people who dislike Twilight have raised. It's like teenage girls are reading it just because of Edward :U But hey, each to his own :p

If you like those genres, you'll probably like Natsuo Kirino's Out. It's about a Japanese girl who kills her husband and chops him up. She gets her friends to help her dispose the body. And yung Cockatrice Boys ni Joan Aiken and The Haunting of Alaizable Cray by Chris Wooding, magaganda rin. They're both for younger readers and they're about monsters who invade England. Maganda rin yung mga kay Garth Nix (Keys to the Kingdom series & Old Kingdom/Abhorsen trilogy)  Grin



helo po..,
i have read the first two chapters of your story. and it was a WOW for me. i like the story. i'll continue reading later. hehe.. Smiley

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kakapost ko lang sa thread mo (:
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« Reply #61 on: April 27, 2008, 02:30:00 PM »



skip mo post ko ha..baaaad! :]]

san na update?adeeek ako.haha
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« Reply #62 on: April 27, 2008, 04:01:10 PM »

Stephanie Meyer's series is really a hit among 'teens', since super duper na iinlove sila kay Edward Cullen. (: But I haven't read the book tho. Hahaha. Mamaya ako rin pala. Yeesh. Cheesy

Nice update. Cheesy Whaaa-- How'd that letter get there?? @___@

I'm no fan of Horror Novels, but this is good. (:
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« Reply #63 on: April 27, 2008, 06:03:06 PM »

Poor Celia.I feelsorry for her..

At least she got somethinng on her birthday Smiley
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« Reply #64 on: April 27, 2008, 08:48:42 PM »

grrr.pwahaha :]]

baka pwedeng magkatuluyan si celia at damien. :]]

ah.modern pala to.haha

kala ko  parang yung setting sa sleepy hollow.
pero anganda parin. Smiley



ahh sorry di ko nakita post mo ): di bale kung makita man natin isa't isa ililibre kitang cheeseburger : P

pwede pwede  Grin
pero masama ata yun. haha.
sayang rin kasi gumastos na si damien sa seminaryo haha.

TRIVIA in vampire folklore, a child born from a human and a vampire is called a "dhampir". dhampirs have the power to spot vampires & hunt them.

Stephanie Meyer's series is really a hit among 'teens', since super duper na iinlove sila kay Edward Cullen. (: But I haven't read the book tho. Hahaha. Mamaya ako rin pala. Yeesh. Cheesy

Nice update. Cheesy Whaaa-- How'd that letter get there?? @___@

I'm no fan of Horror Novels, but this is good. (:


Haha xD I have no problem with people who like Twilight, but I'm annoyed at people who are obsessed with Edward (I'm getting ready for the boo's!).

Secreto na yun ni Batman  Grin

Thank you dear! (:


Poor Celia.I feelsorry for her..

At least she got somethinng on her birthday Smiley

Ang lungkot nga ng birthday niya ):
Pero mas lalala pa (:




V. NO ESCAPING YOUR SINS;;
“i can smell your blood my love, but i can’t taste it yet.” – conjure me, the afghan whigs



Ate, why don’t you join me?Such a sweet angel.

Freddy? I’m sorry Freddy, I didn’t mean to...

I know,” he smiled. He held out a hand to her, and she saw that his wound was still open. She could see the torn muscles where his hand was skinned. “You can have more if you want anyway. Siblings share.


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Celia awoke with a start. She was sweating and crying. She climbed out of bed and saw Fr. Matthias preparing coffee in the dinner table. How would he taste? She shook her head. She hated how she couldn’t help thinking about blood. The blood that she was given tasted good enough, but it wasn’t fresh. And she wasn’t fed every day. As time passed, her craving for blood increased.

She sat down and saw iron supplements scattered across the table.

Are you anemic, Father?” She asked. Screw it. Even talking about blood is making me hungry.

No, this isn’t for me. It’s for Damien.

Huh? That’s strange. He doesn’t look pale or weak.

He’s where your blood comes from.

The girl felt her face grow hot. Stupid. Where else could the blood have come from? Fr. Matthias looked old and didn’t seem like her was capable of losing blood. Damien was in the prime of youth’s vigour. And it was not like the old priest could just take home blood from the blood bank. She cursed her stupidity. I didn’t know... even after the way I treat him, he’s still willing to do this...

Damien emerged from the bathroom, a vial of blood in his hand. He looked away, embarrassed.

To be caught letting an unholy creature live, to be caught giving her his life...

...but maybe she wasn't a monster.

Slowly, he was beginning to see that she was a good person in bad circumstances.


Fr. Matthias cleared his throat. “I asked for a meeting with Mr. Ferrer. It’s set about a week from now.

The girl looked at the floor. She was worried about the priest. What if anything bad happened to him? It was going to be her fault for telling him about it in the first place. If she didn’t do anything, it would still be her fault for not telling him. The way she saw it, whatever she did was wrong. It was like her very existence was a sin.

Father... couldn’t you just... tell the police? Please?

He shook his head. “Then I would have to inform them about you. And even then, we have no assurance that his money and influence cannot get him out of trouble. The best way is to talk to him, man to man, and try to appeal to his good nature.

She was pretty sure he didn't have a good nature.

And was he even a man?

Celia and Damien had agreed not to tell the priest about the note. It would only trouble him if he knew. But since that night, Damien had been coming over more frequently. He didn’t want to leave his two friends alone.

The deacon was silent. He spoke. “I can accompany you, Father. Please, let me.

What is it with those two? Matthias thought. Why were they so afraid? It wasn’t like Ferrer could do anything in broad daylight... right?

I’m sorry, my boy. I already told him that I wanted to talk to him alone. I wouldn’t want to break a promise.

The boy looked away, his brows furrowed in thought. He handed a small glass to Celia. Blood. The girl had almost forgotten how hungry she was.

Thank you.


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The girl had an unsettling effect on him. He had vowed not to think of her as a human, but she had shown him that she still had a conscience. He had vowed not to pity her, but he was failing at that, too. She had disturbed his sheltered world, and he wasn’t sure if he liked it or if he hated it.

It embarrassed him when Celia had seen him with her dinner. The idea had disgusted him at first. He told himself that he was only doing it for Fr. Matthias, but he wasn’t so sure now.

He looked at the girl, who was sitting quietly. She was waiting for the priest to come back, waiting for news of her parents. Something didn’t seem right. She was pale and trembling.

Celia? What’s wrong?

She looked up. “N-nothing... it’s just that I get hungry sometimes.” Her eyes widened when she saw the deacon’s neck, excited by the thought that life pulsed behind his collar. “But I just ignore it and it passes, eventually.

What a terrible liar. She’s been like that for days.

Sighing, he opened a drawer and took a syringe. He felt for a vein and drew blood skilfully.

You don’t have to do this,” Celia said, her voice faltering.

You’re dense, aren’t you? You’re my responsibility now,” he said. He poured the liquid into a shotglass and gave it to Celia.

She drank it wordlessly, her heart hammering in her chest. More. She wanted more.

I’m sorry...” Blood was still on her lips. She didn’t want anyone to see her like this. She wiped her mouth with the back of her hand and stared at the smudge of blood it left. She wanted to lick her hand, drink the blood to the very last drop, but her pride wouldn’t allow it. Not in front of Damien.

As if sensing her thoughts, he spoke. “Do you want more?

She nodded in shame, unable to help herself. He took another syringe but changed his mind. He took a knife from the cupboard. Celia watched in shock when he placed a bowl under his forearm and made an incision.

Damn damn damn damn why is he doing this

Celia couldn’t think straight, or even breathe. The sight of blood was impairing her judgment. She took his arm, not minding the bowl, and caught the blood with her mouth. In the haze of feeding, she was sober enough to take care not to bite the deacon. She heard Damien groan.

(censored for language : P )! She jumped away. Had she taken too much? The boy was pale, but it didn’t look like he was going to pass out. Pressing a hand towel atop his cut, she was angry.

You shouldn’t have done that.

What should I have done, then? You were going to die.

I could have killed you.

And you think I can live with it if I let you die?” The comment was supposed to be friendly, but it pierced her.

You don’t understand. I don’t want to be like this!

Damien stared at her before closing his eyes. Only for a second. He was dizzy from the blood loss.

Wiping her hand on the towel, she took her hat and walked out the door.

When the boy opened his eyes, the girl was gone. He cursed under his breath.


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Why did he have to do it? Celia thought. Why not just let me die? Then they won’t have to worry about me anymore.

She could still taste Damien’s blood. Taken fresh, it was delicious. She laughed bitterly, thinking that the only thing she needed now was to come across Lucian to make her life completely miserable.

Good evening, Lilith.

Lucian was beside her, walking along at her pace.

...why are you here? You’re not human, aren’t you?

No, I’m not.

She hated and feared him, but at least he was someone who could understand her.

Why don’t we sit down for a chat, Lilith? The night is young.








TO BE CONTINUED


PICTURES TO BE ADDED LATER~~ (:
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« Reply #65 on: April 27, 2008, 09:06:26 PM »

Damien is so kind. Ginagawa niya ang lahat para lang mabuhay si Celia.

Anyway, is Lucian Lucifer?  Huh
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« Reply #66 on: April 27, 2008, 09:12:54 PM »

I don't really like vampire stories but I guess yours is cool! keep it up! love it!
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« Reply #67 on: April 27, 2008, 09:35:09 PM »

Damien is so kind. Ginagawa niya ang lahat para lang mabuhay si Celia.

Anyway, is Lucian Lucifer?  Huh

Masungit siya, but he can be kind when he wants to (:

Yep, Lucian & Lucifer means "light".


I don't really like vampire stories but I guess yours is cool! keep it up! love it!

Thank you dear (: ♥

Si Ginji ba yung asa av mo? Ang cute!
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« Reply #68 on: April 27, 2008, 09:37:46 PM »

Ohhhh,,,My...So,,so,,blooddyy..

it's scaringgg meee! hehe..Cheesy
I'm nervous about the pictures...
But, post them! hehe..Smiley
You are really good at writing! Wink
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« Reply #69 on: April 27, 2008, 09:39:38 PM »

So you mean the Lucifer you were referring in the first post was Lucian?  Smiley

Anyway, it's ironic that the demon has the name Lucifer.  Cheesy
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« Reply #70 on: April 27, 2008, 09:43:29 PM »

wow!  Cheesy Shocked




Right from the start Fr. Matthias should have known that Celia is beyond redemption! Why offer sanctuary to a humancreature already damned?!

and omg omg omg, is this what i think it is? I think Reverend Damien is in-love with Celia!   Cheesy


those who are conspirators to the propagation of evil, let them be anathematized!  Cheesy


More! next chapter please!

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Close as I want to be
Close enough for me
To feel your heart beating fast
And stay there as I whisper
How I love your peaceful eyes on me
Did you ever know
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« Reply #71 on: April 27, 2008, 09:43:44 PM »

yeah. yeah. si ginji nga yan. haha. super duper cute talaga. when's the next update, sis?
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« Reply #72 on: April 27, 2008, 09:57:00 PM »

maja, finished reading the 5 chapters. haha. i cant wait for more.. Smiley
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« Reply #73 on: April 27, 2008, 10:00:37 PM »

horror ung mga books nya..
try mu the stand..
nadadala ako masyado kapag nagbabasa weh..
try mu din si james patterson? kung hindi ako nagkakamali..

nice up btw.. Cheesy
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« Reply #74 on: April 27, 2008, 10:20:13 PM »

Ohhhh,,,My...So,,so,,blooddyy..

it's scaringgg meee! hehe..Cheesy
I'm nervous about the pictures...
But, post them! hehe..Smiley
You are really good at writing! Wink

sa first page, may pictures nung mga pari/magpapari.

pero mostly kay fr. matthias, kasi gwapo siya ^__^

thank you dear! (:


So you mean the Lucifer you were referring in the first post was Lucian?  Smiley

Anyway, it's ironic that the demon has the name Lucifer.  Cheesy

yep (: medyo iiexplain sa next chapter.

medyo off topic pero may nabasa akong 2 versions of his fall. yung isa, his pride brought him down. gusto niyang maging mas mataas kay God. yung isa naman, sobrang mahal niya si God na he refused to bow down before humans when he created them because he didn't want to bow down to anyone but his lord. dahil dun he was cast out of heaven (according to persian/sufi traditions) :0 wow.


wow!  Cheesy Shocked




Right from the start Fr. Matthias should have known that Celia is beyond redemption! Why offer sanctuary to a humancreature already damned?!

and omg omg omg, is this what i think it is? I think Reverend Damien is in-love with Celia!   Cheesy


those who are conspirators to the propagation of evil, let them be anathematized!  Cheesy


More! next chapter please!




why not give her a second chance? (:
kawawa naman siya, nagparty lang, tapos pupunta na siya sa impyerno.

maybeee
maybe not.

anyway, one of them (or both, para mas masaya) has to go anyway so it doesn't matter  Grin


yeah. yeah. si ginji nga yan. haha. super duper cute talaga. when's the next update, sis?

siguro mamaya or bukas, kung kelan ako sipagin. kasi natapos ko na kanina yung next chap (:

ang cute rin ni jubei! at kazuki! gusto ko silang i-uwi ^__^


maja, finished reading the 5 chapters. haha. i cant wait for more.. Smiley

thank you! (: ipopost ko na next chap soon~


horror ung mga books nya..
try mu the stand..
nadadala ako masyado kapag nagbabasa weh..
try mu din si james patterson? kung hindi ako nagkakamali..

nice up btw.. Cheesy

thanks sa recommendations, matignan nga sometime (:

tungkol saan yung the stand? di ko kilala si james patterson, but i'll check him out  Grin

thank you!
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