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« on: April 24, 2008, 10:41:02 PM »

...because wala akong magawa kanina, haha. alam ko na yung mangyayari hanggang dulo, i just haven't written everything yet. yung prologue pa lang. by the way...

WARNING/S: There will be blood, lots of it. There will be deaths, and broken hearts, and all that fun stuff. Oh, and don’t forget impalements and Celia’s, er, taboo crush. By the way Lucifer will also be a major character in later chapters. Haha. I started with a very light chapter, though. Para hindi sobrang culture shock. I know that this is different from what you usually see on TTalk, but give my story a chance, will you? : ) Never mind, ginawa ko na lang ttalk friendly. (: May blood and light swear words from time to time, pero nothing detailed. Kumbaga R13 yung rating. (:



NO HEAVEN FOR THE WICKED
[  a    v a m p i r e    s t o r y  ]



PROLOGUE

I.   THROUGH MY FAULT
II.   WE ALL LIVE...
III.   ...ONLY TO DIE
IV.   ENTER LUCIFER
V.   NO ESCAPING YOUR SINS
VI.   “I COLLECT SOULS”
VII.   SAVE THE INNOCENTS
VIII.   WE CAN BE SOBER
IX.   THE GAMBLE
X.   FINAL FORGIVENESS

EPILOGUE



CAST + SETTING

CELIA R. Celia (who turns 17 in the story) used to be a normal teenage girl (who's afraid of blood, by the way :p). She gets bitten by an exchange student from Romania at a party and turns into a vampire. After killing her brother, she turns herself in to the church because she has nowhere else to go to. She meets Fr. Matthias, an old kindly priest, and Rev. Damien, a deacon who seems to hate her.
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i don't know who the girl in the picture is :0 thanks ran1441! (:



FR. MATTHIAS Fr. Matthias is the parish priest of St. Michael's Goodhope Parish and Celia's confessor. He is friendly towards her and gives her sanctuary. In later chapters, he is involved with trying to bring a stop to the killings in Goodhope.
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the pictures are of Msgr. Georg Gänswein, the papal secretary.



DAMIEN S. A 20 year old deacon and Fr. Matthias' close friend. Aside from the priest, he is the only one who knows about Celia's condition. He is distant towards Celia at the start of the story, but he has proven himself to be a compassionate person in later chapters.
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or you can imagine brandon routh, haha.
i have no idea who's in the picture. poor nameless guy D:




LUCIFER Lucifer is the fallen angel of light. In this story, he is in a mortal form and goes under the name "Lucian Ferrer". Ostensibly, he is a philanthropists and the rich CEO of a prestigious banking firm. He is behind all but one of the recent murders. He says that he is not longer content to tempt man and wants to take a more direct approach in collecting souls.
version 1: x x
version 2: x x
there are 2 versions of him, but i've seen a lot of other guys who'd fit him :< may i add them too? haha. anyway, the first is richard gere & the second is an indian actor.. sai something or other.

-- will add pictures & better descriptions later
thanks for the pictures & suggestions pach, emily, ran1441 & wizhart_18 Smiley


The story is set in the town of GOODHOPE. It’s prospering, its inhabitants an unsuspicious lot. But lately there’s been a string of killings in this peaceful town...

--- i googled 'goodhope' and a town came up. don't mind that; it's just a coincidence. :0





the PROLOGUE;;
our heroine learns the consequences of too much partying, excepting a killer hangover.


FROM: mich.gladstone@hotmail.com
TO: love_celia@goodhope.edu
SENT: April 26 ’08, 3:00PM
SUBJECT: girl, leon says you’re tasty.

celia,

i miss you already, girl! i can’t wait to c u again. : )

you were CRAZY last night. you and leon got it on!! i don’t know if you can remember (u had a lot of shots after all) but leon certainly does. he can’t shut up! all throughout our flight he kept going on about how delicious u were. WHAT DID YOU GUYS DO? he's never been like this before.

anyway i uploaded the party pics. comment, ok? & visit us sometime!

with love
m.

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If there was anything Celia had learned from the night before, it was not to trust strange guys. She had gone to her friend Michelle’s goodbye party. Michelle and her fellow exchange students were going back to their countries.

Celia sighed and rubbed her temples. Her headache was killing her! She couldn’t remember everything that had happened, but she had a vague recollection of drinking with Leon, one of the cuter exchange students and passing out. According to Michelle’s e-mail, she and Leon had “gotten it on”.

While she couldn’t remember a thing, the party pictures on Michelle’s Facebook profile and the large hickey on her neck proved that apparently, they had.

She sighed and closed the windows. The light was giving her a headache. She looked at herself in the mirror. The hickey was standing out. How could she hide it from her parents? She grabbed a tube of concealer and applied it skilfully. She stopped when she felt two small, raised pinpricks. On closer inspection, she saw that the wound wasn’t big, but it was red and it looked nasty. Damn it, she thought, Leon better not have some disease!

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Two days later, Celia still had headaches. She found that she hated light and preferred to stay holed up in her room instead. Her parents were relieved in that respect, but they were worried. She hadn’t eaten anything in two days.

Sweetheart, I made your favourite. I followed your lola’s recipe for adobo,” her mother cajoled.

Her mother hadn’t stopped trying to get her to eat. Trying to placate her, she followed her mother to the dining room and looked at the dishes. They had adobo, her favourite. When they were still living in Manila, she had it almost every day. Grilled salmon and dinuguan (another Filipino dish, but one she absolutely loathed) were also laid out on the table.

Hija, have some adobo,” her mother smiled.

Celia returned her smile and heaped pieces of chicken on her plate. But... she just wasn’t hungry. But the pork... she didn’t know why, but they looked so inviting. She filled her plate with pork and poured its sauce, made of pigs’ blood, on her serving instead.

Celia! You never eat dinuguan.” Her mother was shocked. Her little brother, Freddy, laughed.

The teen shrugged. “I guess I just want to try something new, ma.

No sooner had she lifted the spoon to her lips than she smiled for the first time in two days. “Ma, this tastes delicious!

Thank you sweetheart,” her mother smiled back. Her daughter was acting unusual. It wasn’t like her daughter to sleep in all day and it certainly wasn’t like her to enjoy what she once said was “disgusting, filthy pig’s blood”.

But teenagers were unpredictable, weren’t they?

She smiled and fetched another bowl of dinuguan.






TO BE CONTINUED
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« Reply #1 on: April 25, 2008, 11:27:57 AM »

w0w! Cheesy i'm the first tagger! Cheesy nice start! keep it up! Wink
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« Reply #2 on: April 25, 2008, 12:04:42 PM »

Hahaha. New reader here. (:
This is definitely a must-read. Cheesy
Gahd, she turned into a vamp? XD


--Anicia here, btw. Tongue
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« Reply #3 on: April 25, 2008, 12:16:41 PM »

cool!!

love vampires! I was attracted by the title. Grin
gonna support this sis!
update naa!!! Cheesy

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« Reply #4 on: April 25, 2008, 02:24:54 PM »

kakaiba yata toh ah..
and very interesting too.. based on the intro
nakaka-excite.. continue!  Grin

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« Reply #5 on: April 25, 2008, 03:12:18 PM »

the title is really a puller...
gives me the kicks so far...
 Cheesy Grin Cheesy
but have i seen this somewhere??

im not just giving this one a chance but also the hoops...

vamp stories have a lot of redeeming to do for me...
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« Reply #6 on: April 25, 2008, 03:37:16 PM »

thanks po sa mga bagong readers ^___^
+ yays for you all ♥

medyo takot lang ako kasi i intend the later chapters (mga bandang dulo) to be a little bloody @__@; pero may onting romance rin. kaya lang... er... kakaiba yung gusto nung girl.

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but have i seen this somewhere??

as far as i know, wala pang ganitong plot. :0 but seriously, meron? saan?

CHAPTER 1~


I. THROUGH MY FAULT;;
mea culpa, mea culpa, mea maxima culpa.


I’m a vampire, Celia thought, feeling for the first time the gravity of her situation.

I’m sure of it.

It was almost a week and she was still as reclusive as ever, refusing to go out with her friends. She had covered her windows with her mother’s thickest curtains and her coats. She frequently slept in the mornings (which she used to do before, since the parties she went to usually started at midnight and ended at dawn, so it wasn’t a big change for her).

The little details all seemed to piece together: how she suddenly liked dinuguan, the puncture wounds on her neck, sensitivity to light, how she found that she could see clearly in the dark, how she had accidentally cut herself and the wound had healed itself just minutes after.

But, the biggest hitch was that she couldn’t see her reflection.

At first, she thought that she was just having vision problems. She ignored it but when she sat beside her brother while he was watching the TV, she could see his reflection reflected on the monitor’s screen but not hers. She had read enough vampire books to know the signs of vampirism.

Okay, so she didn’t sparkle in the light like the vampires she read about in Anne Rice and Stephanie Meyer’s books.

And she wasn’t repelled by garlic, by roses, by seeds or even by crucifixes.

She also didn’t feel the need to kill the next person who came her way. At least not yet, she thought with a shudder.

She was confused but Celia was determined to do something about it. Turning on her computer, she typed “vampires” in the search engine and numerous hits came up. One offered information on how to “reverse vampirism”. Warily, she clicked the link.

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Contrary to the literary tradition created by Bram Stoker, there is no precedence in folk belief to support the notion that it is necessary for the victim of a vampire to drink the blood of the vampire in order to become a vampire himself. But, quite to the contrary, there are cases where the blood of the vampire was used to cure his victim of the illness inflicted by the vampire and/or to prevent the victim from becoming a vampire himself after he dies.

So that part was true enough. She didn’t remember drinking Leon’s (oh god I’m going to kill him when I see him!) blood. And since Leon was now in Romania, she couldn’t ask him to please give her some of his blood to cure herself. She continued reading. The article basically said that drinking a vampire’s blood would cure you and baking bread using vampire’s blood (how disgusting could you get?) would also be effective. A paragraph caught her attention:

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In both Romania and Rhode Island, there was also a related practice: fumigation by the smoke from the burning heart or corpse.

In her article, The Vampire in Romania cited above, Agnes Murgoci wrote that, in the Romananti district:

“The heart was cut out, and one piece after another burnt. Last of all the heart was burnt and those who came near so that the smoke passed over them, and protected them from evil.”

Having her heart cut out and being burnt didn’t appeal to her. She shut off her computer and was thinking about what she was going to do for the rest of her (after)life when she heard a cry.

ATE! ATE CELIA! HELP!

Freddy! She ran downstairs and saw her little brother crying, his hand trapped between sliding glass doors. The glass was broken, for some reason, and Freddy had tried to dislodge his hand but it had only caused his other hand to bleed and the more he struggled to get his hand free, the worse the situation got. She could see his tissue and the shards of glass that clung to it.

When Celia was a child, she was scared of blood. She would close her eyes whenever she saw blood; it nauseated her. And whenever she had blood tests or shots, she refused to look but still grew pale and often threw up. It came as a surprise to her that while she was afraid of Freddy’s blood, she longed for it at the same time.

Freddy...

The little boy was crying. The blood loss was making him pale. “Ate Celia, please help me...

Celia stared at him. She grabbed a thick glove from the kitchen counter and pulled the door, freeing the boy’s hand. Freddy was crying softly, and asking for their mother, who was working. Celia could feel her heart beating inordinately fast and her breath hitching in her throat. She was hungry, so damn hungry...

Freddy... Come here...” She said, holding out a hand to the boy.

He obeyed wordlessly, hugging his sister. She held his hand delicately, and raised it to her lips. She could smell the heady, intoxicating scent of fresh blood and it was making her dizzy. She took a tentative lick at his wound and liked the taste. She carefully removed the glass shards, not minding the boy’s wince of pain.

I’m hungry Freddy, so hungry,” she whispered, her lips pressed to the boy’s wound. He was trying to pull his hand away, but she gripped it tightly. “Just a small taste,” she pleaded. She bit into her brother’s flesh, the throbbing of her heart and the delicious pump of blood echoing in her ear, reverberating in her body, enough to reduce her brother’s cries of pain to a distant echo.

So delicious...

She drank the blood hungrily, exploring the wound with her tongue, revelling in the soft tissues and ---

--- it didn’t seem fresh anymore. Something had changed.

Frowning, she wiped her mouth with her hand and was brought back to reality. She looked at her brother, his skin pallid and his face contorted in an expression of pain and shock. The realization of what she had done hit her.

Freddy! Freddy! I’m so sorry,” she cried, hugging him. She pressed the glove gently into his wound, applying firm pressure, but she couldn’t feel his pulse anymore. Shaken, she tried to dial their mother’s number on the phone, but what could she tell her? I’m sorry, I killed your son?

Changing out of her blood soaked clothes; she knew what she had to do.

----

Fr. Matthias, the parish priest of St. Michael’s Goodhope Parish, was taken aback by the young girl who was breathless and looked disturbed. He recognized her as one of the newer immigrants in their town. She rarely went to Mass, but here she was, begging for a confession in the middle of the night.

We’re not holding confessions right now, but you can come tomorrow in the afternoon,” he told her.

She shook her head and her voice was laced with despair.

No, Father, I have to confess now,” she implored.

Curiosity got the best of the priest as he led the trembling girl into the confessionals. He bade her to sit, and she began, conjuring words that she had almost forgotten from disuse:

Forgive me Father for I have sinned. My last good confession was almost six years ago.

She was silent, but at length, she continued. Her voice was barely audible.

I am guilty of the sin of murder.




TO BE CONTINUED


disclaimer: the parts in quotes are taken from Monstrous, an online encyclopedia on monsters. (:
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« Reply #7 on: April 25, 2008, 07:46:30 PM »

Ehh? @___@ She killed her own brother?
Yeeeesh. XD That's creepy.

I mean.. She actually craved for his blood?! @___@
Huwaa~ But at least, something new here in CC. Grin
Hahahaha. Next please?
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« Reply #8 on: April 25, 2008, 07:58:26 PM »

Ehh? @___@ She killed her own brother?
Yeeeesh. XD That's creepy.

I mean.. She actually craved for his blood?! @___@
Huwaa~ But at least, something new here in CC. Grin
Hahahaha. Next please?


thanks for reading dear (:

gutom siya eh. haha. i'm researching about priests para hindi sobrang inaccurate yung next chapter ^__^

nakita ko dun sa isang catholic forum may nagtatanong kung ano yung penance for murder. pwede raw 3 Hail Mary. wow. :0
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« Reply #9 on: April 25, 2008, 08:05:06 PM »

^ EH? @_______________@
3 Hail Mary's for murder?? Grabe?

I'm not Roman Catholic, religion wise, pero I know about those things.
Hinde ba masyadong onti yun para sa murder? :-/
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« Reply #10 on: April 25, 2008, 09:16:38 PM »

^ EH? @_______________@
3 Hail Mary's for murder?? Grabe?

I'm not Roman Catholic, religion wise, pero I know about those things.
Hinde ba masyadong onti yun para sa murder? :-/


What's your religion ba? (: I was raised in a Catholic environment but I'm partial to Agnosticism. I saw this on a forum:

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A priest may assign a penance that seems totally out of proportion to the sin in order to show that the price of sin has truly been paid by Jesus on the Cross. Nothing we do could ever make up for any sin, including/especially murder. It could be 3 Hail Marys if that's the priest's usual penance. That would be an interesting lesson to include in your story.

Depende na raw yun sa priest.

Pero I also read something about fasting for 7 years as penance for murder (15 years for homosexuality). And also something by Augustine about "formal penance", whatever that is. @__@; Ang gulo, haha. I wish andito yung pari kong tito. : P
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« Reply #11 on: April 25, 2008, 09:39:02 PM »

grabe, natatakot na ako ngayon
mag-sa pa naman ako dito sa kwarto,
aha!  Cheesy babasahin ko nalang pala sis ang mga upcoming updates mo pag umaga or hapon..
kasi.. eee.. impractical man, pero i easily get scared when it comes to these things..
pero okay lang, haha, para maiba naman yung mga nababasa ko,  Grin

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« Reply #12 on: April 25, 2008, 11:37:33 PM »

GALENG! BRRRRRAVO!


this is actually my first time ever to post in this board! you made it, maja!

this is a very promising story, i swear. you go on, and yea, i like the information tidbits. sprinkle your story with facts and figures from time to time..  Cheesy



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« Reply #13 on: April 25, 2008, 11:47:16 PM »

it was a nice start,, Grin

may bago nanaman akong babasahin sa creative corner.. Grin

next chappie na.. Grin
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« Reply #14 on: April 26, 2008, 01:12:20 AM »



she's creepy! Shocked

Love it!
next na! Cheesy

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